Description B – Here the writer has taken the simple description and added to it. Now the reader has to think and use imagination.
Beyond the low, wooden bridge the old lock sleeps, forgotten and motionless as if trapped by the strange, haunting trees that surround it.
Let’s look more closely.
Beyond the low, wooden bridge the old lock sleeps .
Adjectives – ‘low, wooden and old’ - used to describe the bridge and the lock.
Verb / Personification – ‘sleeps’– The writer has made the lock seem human.
The writer has also used the word ‘haunting’.
‘haunting’ suggests something mysterious or frightening.
With this one word the writer has introduced a sense of mystery. Just what is happening in the picture?
What else can the writer use?
Let’s add another sentence to Description B.
Beyond the low wooden bridge the old lock sleeps, forgotten and motionless as if trapped by the strange haunting trees that surround it. Their branches are like a tall giant’s fine fingers grasping at the walls.
What has the writer used now?
Their branches are like a tall giant’s fine, fingers grasping at the walls .
Simile – ‘like’– the writer has said the subject is like something else. It adds to the picture in the reader’s imagination.
Alliteration – ‘fine, fingers’ – words with the same beginning sound used one after another. It sounds super!