Look at the picture again closely. Then read Description a & Description B



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  • Look at the picture again closely.
  • Then read Description A & Description B.
  • Description A
  • Beyond the bridge is an old lock.
  • Description B
  • Think about the descriptions. Which one do you like the best and why?
  • Beyond the wall is an old lock.
  • Description B – Here the writer has taken the simple description and added to it. Now the reader has to think and use imagination.
  • Beyond the low, wooden bridge the old lock sleeps, forgotten and motionless as if trapped by the strange, haunting trees that surround it.
  • Let’s look more closely.
  • Beyond the low, wooden bridge the old lock sleeps .
  • Adjectives – ‘low, wooden and old’ - used to describe the bridge and the lock.
  • Verb / Personification – ‘sleeps’– The writer has made the lock seem human.
  • The writer has also used the word ‘haunting’.
  • ‘haunting’ suggests something mysterious or frightening.
  • With this one word the writer has introduced a sense of mystery. Just what is happening in the picture?
  • What else can the writer use?
  • Let’s add another sentence to Description B.
  • Beyond the low wooden bridge the old lock sleeps, forgotten and motionless as if trapped by the strange haunting trees that surround it. Their branches are like a tall giant’s fine fingers grasping at the walls.
  • Description B
  • What has the writer used now?
  • Their branches are like a tall giant’s fine, fingers grasping at the walls .
  • Simile – ‘like’– the writer has said the subject is like something else. It adds to the picture in the reader’s imagination.
  • Alliteration – ‘fine, fingers’ – words with the same beginning sound used one after another. It sounds super!
  • What makes good descriptive writing?
  • Adjectives
  • Personification
  • Alliteration
  • Similes
  • These are just some of the building blocks!
  • Now look at some different pictures of Fourteen Locks.
  • Make a mind map of your ideas for description.
  • Use your ideas to write exciting descriptive sentences.
  • Remember to use the building blocks!
  • Adjectives
  • Personification
  • Alliteration
  • Similes


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