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Instructions: Using your essay in response to the unit's writing prompt, complete the following steps to improve your essay.

Essay with Revisions

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Many people throughout time have been praised for being a patriot or condemned for being a backstabber. Ever since the era of William Shakespeare, people have trying to address whether Brutus is a noble patriot or a despicable betrayer. Some people say that Brutus murdered his best friend, with self-interested conspirators, for a crime that he could have possibly made and not one he actually commit. It is true that these are Brutus‘s actions; however, if we are to make a judgment on whether Brutus is a betrayer or a patriot on these grounds alone. We must not only look at his actions but also seek out his state of mind, his thought process, and motivations. In order to justly convict Brutus to the label of a betrayer, I think that we mustn’t just judge him for his actions but see the full and complex picture. We must seek out why Brutus did what he did. In the play, Brutus is depicted as a noble and honorable man, whose love and patriotism for Rome, leaded to the wrongfully labeling of a betrayer. Not only by the people which he hurt, but also by the people which he sought out to protect. I believe that if any person takes the time to analyze Brutus and his difficult decision, they will be able to see the character of Brutus and know he was a patriot of Rome.

Contrary to my personal believe, many people proclaim Brutus as a betrayer because he killed his good friend. In the play by William Shakespeare, Brutus joins a group of conspirators whose goal is murder Julius Caesar. Brutus joins the conspirators after Cassius notices Brutus’s ill feelings toward Caesar being King. Cassius proceeds to convince Brutus that if Caesar were to become king of Rome, he would abuse his power and turn Romains to slaves. In this direct quote from Cassius he describes the personality of Caesar and what would happen to Romains if he would become king “Why, man, he doth bestride the narrow world Like a Colossus, and we petty men Walk under his huge legs and peep about to find ourselves dishonorable graves.” Later in the play Brutus is furtherer convinced that killing Caesar is best for Rome, by getting false letters from citizens of Rome. To justify Brutus as being a patriot we must look at things from his perspective and ignore information that is not known to Brutus. From Brutus’s point of view, Brutus knows that throughout history, many rulers have abused their powers, enslaved their people and caused their empires to crumble. Realizing that if Caesar were to come to power he would be no expatiation, and he could cause the fall of Rome. Later Brutus is further convinced by Cassius that Caesar could cause the fall of Rome, because of the personality of Caesar. Also, when Brutus is home he receives letters, from what he believes to be from Romains, pleading to not let Caesar be king. Because of how much history repeat itself, the type of personality of Caesar, and wants of the people, Brutus justifies his killing of Caesar by believing that it was for the good of Rome.

In the play, readers can see that each conspirator has their own motivations and interests. Some people say that Brutus is a betrayer, on the bases on the fact that he partnered with people that killed Caesar for their own interest. People conclude that Brutus is a betrayer because like the old saying goes: you are what you surround yourself with. Because Brutus was convinced by Cassius that Caesar should not be king, with reasonable reasons and not that of his own motivations. Brutus throughout the play assumes Cassius and all the other conspirators have noble and honorable reasons for killing Caesar like his own. So to assume that Brutus is a betrayer only based on the fact that the other conspirators were betrayers is unjust. Because in the play Brutus believes that his comrades are honorable like himself.

Despite being labeled a Betrayer by some, Brutus displays his many traits of a noble patriot. In act two, scene one, Brutus shows that does not want to harm anyone who is not essential in keeping Rome a free and democratic city. In that scene Brutus is confronted with a decision that will make him a patriot or a betrayer. He is asked if conspirators should murder Anthony. Brutus, being a patriot of Rome, decides that Anthony is no threat to the freedom of the roman people. Brutus displays that he is no betrayer, by saving the life or Anthony, but instead shows that he is patriot of Rome because he knows that Caesar is the only real threat to the roman people.

In addition to having saved the life of Anthony, Brutus also displays being a patriot when he is motivated by the false letters, Brutus thought the letters were really from Romans, this shows that Brutus truly cares about Rome and its people. In act two, scene one, Brutus’s patriotism is manipulated by Cassius. Cassius makes some fake letters and sends them to Brutus with the intention of convincing Brutus to join the group. Because Brutus is manipulated by a betrayer, people sometime say that Brutes is a traitor. Consequently Brutus’s character trait of being a patriot is manipulated by Cassius’s own personal interests, causing Brutus to be misinterpret labeled as a betrayer. Although Brutus is controlled by Cassius, his character always returns to his patriotism to make decisions, which proves that Brutus is a patriot even when manipulated by a betrayer.

Furthermore in the play, Brutus always displays that he made his decisions based on his patriotism and what was going to be for the good of Rome. Brutus shows this when he saved the life of Anthony, when he obliges by what he thought was the word of the people, and also when he takes his own life when Rome needed it. This quote from Brutus shows the promise that Brutus makes to Rome: “I slew my best lover for the good of Rome; I have the same dagger for myself when it shall please my country to need my death.” Later on in Act five, Brutus shows his loyalty to Rome, by keeping his oath and turning his own blade on himself when Rome needed it. Even to Brutus’s opponents, he is a patriot that did only what he believed was right. In this quote by Anthony, he praises Brutus for being the only conspirator that killed Caesar for what he believed was right: “This was the noblest Roman of them all. All the conspirators save only he did that they did in envy of great Caesar. He only in a general honest thought And common good to all, made one of them.”



In conclusion I conclude that throughout the play Brutus always resembled a patriot and never a betrayer. Must people that say that Brutus is a betrayer mostly base their belief on the most direct and clear actions that Brutus made that could be seen as bad like killing Caesar and joining jealous driven conspirators. I believe that in order label Brutus as a patriot or betrayer, a person must also fully understand Brutus’s motivations and thoughts. When Brutus kills Caesar, he can be seen as a betrayer because he killed his good friend. But when a person sees the full picture, they can clearly see that Brutus never acted to be a betrayer, but instead always depicted a patriot. In the play Brutus always thought that he was doing what was best for Rome. Brutus thought that people didn’t want Caesar as their king, from the false letters, so he justified his decisions by believing that for the best of all. This proves that Brutus is a patriot and not a betrayer.

Grammar

  1. Check your essay for grammatical errors. Highlight or underline any parts of your essay that should be corrected.

  2. Correct the grammatical errors you identified and place your revisions here.

    • From Brutus’s point of view, Brutus knows that throughout history many rulers have abused their powers, causing enslavement of their people and also causing their empires to crumble.

    • In the play (Act two, scene one), Brutus shows that does not want to harm anyone who is not essential in keeping Rome a free and democratic city.

    • In the play (act two, scene one), Brutus’s patriotism is manipulated by Cassius.

    • Brutus shows this when he saves the life of Anthony, when he acted on what he believed to be the word of the people, and also when he takes his own life when Rome needed it.

    • In conclusion to my argument, I believe that throughout the play Brutus always resembled a patriot and never a betrayer.

    • Most people that say that Brutus is a betrayer mostly base their belief on the most direct and clear actions that Brutus made that could be seen as bad like killing Caesar and joining jealous driven conspirators.

Transitions

  1. Paste the transitions from your essay here.

Transitions used: In conclusion, Contrary, because, Also, Despite, but, in addition, Although, Furthermore, Later, Even, and In conclusion.

  1. There should be at least one transition per paragraph. Based on what you found in your essay, what can you do to improve your transitions? Explain here.

Based on what I found on the essay I can improve my transitions by using more Contrasting transitions to contrast Brutus from a betrayer.

  1. Use the transition sheet to help you revise your transitions. Put your revised transitions here.

Transitions used: however, contrary, yet, In conclusion, Contrary, because, Also, Despite, but, in addition, Although, Furthermore, Later, Even, and In conclusion.

Conclusion

  1. Review your concluding paragraph.

    • Show what transition you have used to signal closure of the essay.

    • Explain how you have synthesized the argument.

      • I have synthesized the argument by quickly listing my claim and refuting my counter claim.

    • Identify what you have done to challenge your readers.

  • I challenged my readers to try to see all the small details that prove that Brutus is a patriot.

    • Review these details and determine how you can strengthen your conclusion.



  1. Revise your conclusion to make it stronger and place the revision here.

In conclusion to my argument, I believe that throughout the play Brutus always resembled a patriot and never a betrayer. Most people that say that Brutus is a betrayer mostly base their belief on the most direct and clear actions that Brutus made in the play. Like killing Caesar and joining jealous driven conspirators. I believe that in order to correctly label Brutus as a patriot or betrayer, a person must also fully understand Brutus’s motivations and thoughts. When Brutus kills Caesar, he can be seen as a betrayer because he killed his good friend. But when a person sees the full picture, they can clearly see that Brutus never acted to be a betray Caesar, but instead acted on protecting Rome. In the play Brutus always thought that he was doing what was best for Rome and acting on the wants of the people. Brutus thought that Romans didn’t want Caesar as their king, from the false letters, so he justified his actions by believing that it was for the public good. This proves that Brutus is a patriot and not a betrayer.

Share with a Friend

  1. Ask a friend or family member to read your essay. Challenge that person to find at least two areas for improvement. List your friend or family member’s suggestions here.

Two things that where suggested were to improve my essay were to include more direct quotes from the passage and to transition better from idea to idea.

Final Read Through

  1. Read your essay aloud to yourself. Check for errors one last time.

Final Draft

  1. Paste your final draft here.

Many people throughout time have been praised for being a patriot or condemned for being a backstabber. Ever since the era of William Shakespeare, the character of Brutus has been seen as noble patriot or a despicable betrayer. Some say that Brutus murdered his best friend, with self-interested conspirators, for a crime that he could have possibly made and not one he actually commit; leading them to say that Brutus is a betrayer. It is true that these are Brutus‘s actions; however, if we are to make a judgment on whether Brutus is a betrayer or a patriot on these grounds alone. We must not only look at his actions but also seek out his state of mind, his thought process, and motivations. In order to justly convict Brutus to the label of a betrayer, I think that we mustn’t just judge him for his actions but see the full and complex picture. We must seek out why Brutus did what he did. In the play, Brutus is depicted as a noble and honorable man, whose love and patriotism for Rome, leaded to the wrongfully labeling of a betrayer. Not only by the people which he hurt, but also by the people which he sought out to protect. I believe that if any person takes the time to analyze Brutus and his difficult decision, they will be able to see the character of Brutus and know he was a patriot of Rome.

Contrary to my personal believe, many people proclaim Brutus as a betrayer because he killed his good friend. In the play by William Shakespeare, Brutus joins a group of conspirators whose goal is murder Julius Caesar. Brutus joins the conspirators after Cassius notices Brutus’s ill feelings toward Caesar being King. Cassius proceeds to convince Brutus that if Caesar were to become king of Rome, he would abuse his power and turn Romains to slaves. In this direct quote from Cassius he describes the personality of Caesar and what would happen to Romains if he would become king: “Why, man, he doth bestride the narrow world Like a Colossus, and we petty men Walk under his huge legs and peep about to find ourselves dishonorable graves.” Later in the play Brutus is furtherer convinced that killing Caesar is best for Rome, by getting fake letters from citizens of Rome. However, to justify Brutus as being a patriot we must look at things from his perspective and ignore information that is not known to Brutus. From Brutus’s point of view, Brutus knows that throughout history many rulers have abused their powers, causing enslavement of their people and also causing their empires to crumble. Realizing that if Caesar were to come to power he would be no expatiation, and he could cause the fall of Rome. Later Brutus is further convinced by Cassius that Caesar could cause the fall of Rome, because of the personality of Caesar. Also, when Brutus is home he receives letters, from what he believes to be from Romains, pleading to not let Caesar be king. Because of how much history repeat itself, the type of personality of Caesar, and wants of the people, Brutus justifies his killing of Caesar by believing that it was for the good of Rome.

In the play, readers can see that each conspirator has their own motivations and interests. Some people say that Brutus is a betrayer, on the bases on the fact that he partnered with people that killed Caesar for their own interest. People conclude that Brutus is a betrayer because like the old saying goes: you are what you surround yourself with. Because Brutus was convinced by Cassius that Caesar should not be king, with reasonable reasons and not that of his own motivations. Brutus throughout the play assumes Cassius and all the other conspirators have noble and honorable reasons for killing Caesar like his own. So to assume that Brutus is a betrayer only based on the fact that the other conspirators were betrayers is unjust. Because in the play Brutus believes that his comrades are honorable like himself.

Despite being labeled a Betrayer by some, Brutus displays his many traits of a noble patriot. In the play (Act two, scene one), Brutus shows that does not want to harm anyone who is not essential in keeping Rome a free and democratic city. In that scene Brutus is confronted with a decision that will make him a patriot or a betrayer. He is asked if conspirators should murder Anthony. Brutus, being a patriot of Rome, decides that Anthony is no threat to the freedom of the roman people. Brutus displays that he is no betrayer, by saving the life or Anthony, but instead shows that he is patriot of Rome because he knows that Caesar is the only real threat to the roman people.

In addition to having saved the life of Anthony, Brutus also displays being a patriot when he is motivated by the false letters, Brutus thought the letters were really from Romans, this shows that Brutus truly cares about Rome and its people. In the play (act two, scene one), Brutus’s patriotism is manipulated by Cassius. Cassius makes some fake letters and sends them to Brutus with the intention of convincing Brutus to join the group. Because Brutus is manipulated by a betrayer, people sometime say that Brutes is a traitor. Consequently Brutus’s character trait of being a patriot is manipulated by Cassius’s own personal interests, causing Brutus to be misinterpret labeled as a betrayer. Although Brutus is controlled by Cassius, his character always returns to his patriotism to make decisions, which proves that Brutus is a patriot even when manipulated by a betrayer.

Furthermore in the play, Brutus always displays that he made his decisions based on his patriotism and what was going to be for the good of Rome. Brutus shows this when he saves the life of Anthony, when he acted on what he believed to be the word of the people, and also when he takes his own life when Rome needed it. This quote from Brutus shows the promise that Brutus makes to Rome: “I slew my best lover for the good of Rome; I have the same dagger for myself when it shall please my country to need my death.” Later on in Act five, Brutus shows his loyalty to Rome, by keeping his oath and turning his own blade on himself when Rome needed it. Even to Brutus’s opponents, he is a patriot that did only what he believed was right. In this quote by Anthony, he praises Brutus for being the only conspirator that killed Caesar for what he believed was right: “This was the noblest Roman of them all. All the conspirators save only he did that they did in envy of great Caesar. He only in a general honest thought And common good to all, made one of them.”



In conclusion to my argument, I believe that throughout the play Brutus always resembled a patriot and never a betrayer. Most people that say that Brutus is a betrayer mostly base their belief on the most direct and clear actions that Brutus made in the play. Like killing Caesar and joining jealous driven conspirators. I believe that in order to correctly label Brutus as a patriot or betrayer, a person must also fully understand Brutus’s motivations and thoughts. When Brutus kills Caesar, he can be seen as a betrayer because he killed his good friend. But when a person sees the full picture, they can clearly see that Brutus never acted to be a betray Caesar, but instead acted on protecting Rome. In the play Brutus always thought that he was doing what was best for Rome and acting on the wants of the people. Brutus thought that Romans didn’t want Caesar as their king, from the false letters, so he justified his actions by believing that it was for the public good. This proves that Brutus is a patriot and not a betrayer.

Reflection

  1. Write your reflection paragraph here. You are done!

My thoughts on this argument essay and the play of Julies Caesar have been very positive. For this module I had to read Julies Caesar by William Shakespeare, this was something that I thought I would not enjoy, but when I started to grasp and understand the play I enjoyed it very much. I also enjoyed trying to judge Brutus as ether a betrayer or a patriot. To make my judgment I had to see the play from Brutus’s experiences and knowledge. After rereading the play, I determined that Brutus was a patriot because he truly only acted on his patriotism for Rome.

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