As he considers the Puritans’ plight in the New World because the Puritans believe that the Bible parallels real life, reveals God’s plan, and they use it to guide their behavior. This thesis is not parallel



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  1. Thesis—must be parallel

In Plymouth Plantation William Bradford uses the Bible to comfort himself as he considers the Puritans’ plight in the New World because the Puritans believe that the Bible parallels real life, reveals God’s plan, and they use it to guide their behavior.

THIS THESIS IS NOT PARALLEL

(Notice how the thesis mentions William Bradford and Plymouth Plantation.)

See Parallel structure page 36 in Style Book



THIS THESIS IS PARALLEL:

William Bradford uses the Bible to comfort himself as he considers the Puritans’ plight in the New World because the Puritans believe that the Bible parallels real life, reveals God’s plan, and guides their behavior.



  1. How to avoid a run-on in your thesis:

William Bradford uses the Bible to comfort himself as he considers the Puritans’ plight in the New World because the Puritans believe that the Bible parallels real life, the Bible reveals God’s plan, and the Bible guides their behavior.

Fix this sentence so that it is not a run-on.

William Bradford uses the Bible to comfort himself as he considers the Puritans’ plight in the New World because the Puritans believe that the Bible parallels real life; the Bible reveals God’s plan, and the Bible guides their behavior. ↑ use a semicolon to join two

independent clauses (two complete sentences).

Use of semicolons page 31


  1. Notice that the reasons are offered in the thesis—not the examples.

William Bradford uses the Bible to comfort himself as he considers the Puritans’ plight in the New World because the Puritans believe that the Bible parallels real life, reveals God’s plan, and guides their behavior.

Examples in thesis---NO!

William Bradford uses the Bible to comfort himself as he considers the Puritans’ plight in the New World because the Puritans had no safe place to land, had to fight the Indians, and found corn and beans.



NO! NO! NO!

  1. Topic Sentences

William Bradford uses the Bible to comfort himself as he considers the Puritans’ plight in the New World because the Puritans believe that the Bible parallels real life, reveals God’s plan, and guides their behavior (because…topic sentence)

Is this an appropriate topic sentence—a sentence that could theoretically follow the word because when placed after the thesis statement?

The Puritans arrived in the New World on the Mayflower after the Speedwell had to return to England. The trip across the ocean was very difficult. ???????????????? NO

Is this appropriate paragraph development?

The Puritans arrived in the New World on the Mayflower after the Speedwell had to return to England. The trip across the ocean was very difficult. Once the Mayflower approached the coast, it took another 30 days or so before everyone could disembark. Once on land, fifty percent of the Puritans died during the first winter…

No, it is story-telling…It is not a SEXI paragraph. Story-telling or summarizing will earn you a low score on the SAT essay and all other essays in any subject or grade level.

The following is an appropriate topic sentence that should follow the thesis:

thesis→↓

William Bradford uses the Bible to comfort himself as he considers the Puritans’ plight in the New World because the Puritans believe that the Bible parallels real life, reveals God’s plan, and guides their behavior…because…topic sentence…



Topic sentence one:

Bradford realizes that the various hardships facing the Puritans are modeled in the Bible.

EXPLAIN


In Puritan belief, anything that happened in the Bible will happen to man on Earth; therefore, any joy or hardship should be embraced by man as the work of God.

EXAMPLES


As Bradford notes the lack of “inns or friends or towns,” he reflects on a similar event in the Bible when the apostles were greeted in Malta. Because these Biblical characters endured and thrived, Bradford knows that his people will also endure.

INTERPRET AND CONCLUDE

The Puritans’ staunch belief that they were living according to the Bible as God intended gave them the will and strength to go on.

Topic sentence 2:

TRANSITION!!!!!!!!! PAGE 13 IN STYLEBOOK

In addition, Bradford reflects on the Bible because he knows that it reveals God’s plan for the Puritans.

EXPLAIN


The Puritans relied on the idea of Divine Providence in order to conquer difficulties and appreciate gifts. Divine Providence is a concept that implies that everything that happens to a Puritan is a test from God;

EXAMPLES


thus, when the Puritans are faced with “barbarians” they know that they will endure and “vanquish” their enemies because God intends for them to do so just as the characters in the gospels suffer their enemies in the Biblical story.

INTERPRET AND CONCLUDE



As Bradford refers to the Bible as he considers the dangers facing the Puritans, he comforts himself by noting that a Divine Providence will ensure their safety.

TRANSITION TOPIC SENTENCE 3:

Finally, Bradford uses the Bible to support the Puritans’ practical and temperate life style, which will ensure their success.

EXPLAIN


The Puritans followed the Bible with no interpretation, causing them to be single-minded, plain, sober, temperate, and practical. These are the same qualities that allowed them to thrive in the New World. Behaving in any way that was not prescribed in the Bible would certainly cause them to falter as they pursued their purpose of establishing a

EXAMPLES

God’s city on a hill.” When Bradford notes that the gospel says that man must maintain hope just as Moses hoped at Pisgah, he knows that the Puritans will model this behavior. When the Puritans find the corn and beans in the sand, they take them and plant them, hoping that their future will be secure with the anticipated crops.

INTERPRET AND CONCLUDE



When the Puritans model the behavior indicated to them in the Bible, they know that it will allow them to realize their purpose in America.

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