Do not use two “–ing verbs” in a thesis statement and then one “to plus infinitive verb”
He loves biking, walking, and to swim.
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In Kate Chopin’s The Awakening, Robert Lebrun’s morality is tested by Edna Pontellier when Edna tempted him by kissing him, when Alcee Arobin came over to visit Edna after Robert returned from Mexico, and on Grand Isle where she would spend most of her time with him.
In Kate Chopin’s The Awakening, Robert Lebrun’s morality is tested by Edna Pontellier when Edna tempts him by kissing him, when Edna meets with Alcee while Robert is in Mexico, and when Edna spends her time with Robert.
Word Choice: Cliché, Vague Language, and Passive Voice
A good topic sentence encompasses all ideas that will be discussed in the paragraph.
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Edna is married to a Creole man who is confident.
*This paragraph discusses the way in
which Edna does not give in to Leonce’s
Though Leonce Pontellier, Edna’s husband, is confident in his marriage, Edna refuses to submit to his wishes.
Content reflecting thesis
Your content must reflect the three points you make in your thesis.
Use your thesis as a guide when you write your topic sentences.
Thesis: In Kate Chopin’s The Awakening, moral characters can easily be identified by their actions, their thoughts and beliefs about certain subjects, and their appearances.
TS 1: In the 1900s, the rules of society had to be followed.
TS 2: Women had no independence, and women had to respect their husbands.
TS 3: Adele Ratignolle’s life is based around morality.
Thesis: Although Edna Pontellier discovers her independence in Kate Chopin’s The Awakening, her choices reflect her immorality through her neglect for her children, her independent behavior within society, and her infidelity.
TS 1: Edna’s independence becomes immoral when she neglects her responsibility as a mother.
TS 2: Another way Edna’s independence causes her to be immoral is her behavior in society.
TS 3: Edna’s new immoral independence intensifies when she cheats on her husband with Robert Lebrun and Alcee Arobin.
Edna Pontellier takes several steps to find her independence in The Awakening, yet this freedom comes at a price. Despite her duties as a mother and a wife, Edna chooses to neglect them for the sake of discovering her independence and feeling like an individual. As a mother, Edna breaks away from the love that mothers should give to their children and, instead, chooses to focus on her own self. Within society, her newfound independence causes her reputation to be destroyed and her morals to be abandoned. Edna’s infidelity causes her to lose not only all three of the men with whom she is involved but also herself.
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You will receive a passage to correct as a group. Errors can include any mistakes discussed in this PowerPoint.